Dear Mr. Redwoods,
Overall good story or essay. but you sould make your paragraphs have atleast 5 to 8 sentences because, ehh' its kinda to short. You would also like to add some more details. i get your point of the story but i wanna visualize it in my head. as i visualize it its kinda scrtachy and not clear. just tighten it a bit then your good to go. :) But overall good essay or story.
Dear Mr. or Mrs. Mouse Alert,
I love the way you write. It actually goes with the flow yeauh know?? aha well you have great details and a really good way of words. you should keep it up. im not really a good writer and all but i just gotta say GOOD JOB. you have good sentences and good pragraphs. if i were you i would make a sequal. xD i dnt knoo just sayin. ahah. But keepi it up!!
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